I think that this piece has some very nice sounds.
If I may make a suggestion, I feel that you have too
many different ideas which (although quite good in
themselves) do not always relate to each other.
Eg: You begin with a fine Alberti Bass and a pleasant
melody - them you have a sudden "trill" of 32nd notes,
which doesn't really go anywhere. Then there are some
sudden scale passages (some diatonic and some chromatic)
I feel that it would be more unified if you used fewer ideas
and developed them - rather than throwing in a completely
new ideas that don't relate to anything that has gone before.
I hope that this makes sense to you.
Hi Jeff. First of all, thank you for the time and attention you put into my work. Your advice is very useful.
Now, I would like to defend my decisions.
As you may know, composition is born from the inspiration and experience of musicians.
Great creators used techniques, harmonies, melodies and orchestrations that do not understand each other, always.
I don't quite understand your problem with trills; I use each one consciously. And I don't understand that "it doesn't lead anywhere." What are you getting at? Music is subjective, my friend.
Each trill goes to the precise notes that I, as a composer, want.
As for scales, it's the same. In bar 28 they lead to the F# chord and in bar 30, the scale leads to the A chord. Both, I think I use them in a practical way.
And finally, as for "many ideas"... well.
This piece is a RONDÓ, I suppose you know what that is. The structure of this form is: A-B-A-C-A, etc. The form itself IS FOR MANY IDEAS. I don't understand your objections at this point.
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I think that this piece has some very nice sounds.
If I may make a suggestion, I feel that you have too
many different ideas which (although quite good in
themselves) do not always relate to each other.
Eg: You begin with a fine Alberti Bass and a pleasant
melody - them you have a sudden "trill" of 32nd notes,
which doesn't really go anywhere. Then there are some
sudden scale passages (some diatonic and some chromatic)
I feel that it would be more unified if you used fewer ideas
and developed them - rather than throwing in a completely
new ideas that don't relate to anything that has gone before.
I hope that this makes sense to you.
In reply to I think that this piece has… by jeffcarrollco
Hi Jeff. First of all, thank you for the time and attention you put into my work. Your advice is very useful.
Now, I would like to defend my decisions.
As you may know, composition is born from the inspiration and experience of musicians.
Great creators used techniques, harmonies, melodies and orchestrations that do not understand each other, always.
I don't quite understand your problem with trills; I use each one consciously. And I don't understand that "it doesn't lead anywhere." What are you getting at? Music is subjective, my friend.
Each trill goes to the precise notes that I, as a composer, want.
As for scales, it's the same. In bar 28 they lead to the F# chord and in bar 30, the scale leads to the A chord. Both, I think I use them in a practical way.
And finally, as for "many ideas"... well.
This piece is a RONDÓ, I suppose you know what that is. The structure of this form is: A-B-A-C-A, etc. The form itself IS FOR MANY IDEAS. I don't understand your objections at this point.